What should the writer have done better in terms of the in-text citations use in the essay?
A: They should have used more current sourcesIncorrect: The sources cited in the essay are not outdated. One of them was published in 2010 and the other only in 2016.
B: They should have used more than two sources to substantiate their claimsCorrect: The writer should have used more than two sources to substantiate their claims. The first and second body paragraphs contain some unsupported statements, and the third body paragraph has no supporting evidence at all.
C: They should have cited each source more than once in the essayIncorrect: The writer used two different citations from Posso (2016). However, it is not essential in academic writing to cite every source more than once.
Identify the examples of hedging language used in the essay.
A: tend to improve, may assist, tend to develop, may harm productivityCorrect: These are some of the examples of hedging/mitigation used by the writer to mitigate their claims.
B: have quite powerful effect, amazing positive effects, highly essentialIncorrect: These are not the examples of hedging, but some examples of emotional language used by the writer. Emotional language needs to be avoided in academic writing.
C: the first major advantage, another beneficial effect, to concludeIncorrect: These are not the examples of hedging, but some examples of signposting used by the writer to establish cohesion between paragraphs and to show the links between the main points in the essay.
What is missing in the fourth paragraph of the essay?
A: A topic sentenceIncorrect: The topic sentence is stated clearly at the beginning of the paragraph.
B: A supporting evidenceCorrect: No research-based evidence is used in the paragraph.
C: A concluding sentenceIncorrect: The concluding sentence is given at the end of the paragraph.
Which of the essay paragraphs gives a counterargument by focusing on the disadvantages of video games?
A: Paragraph 2Incorrect: This paragraph focuses on one of the advantages of video games, namely, an improvement in rapid information processing and fast decision-making skills.
B: Paragraph 3Incorrect: This paragraph focuses on one of the advantages of video games, namely, the enhancement of cognitive and perceptual skills in children.
C: Paragraph 4Correct: This paragraph aims to illustrate some disadvantages of video games, such as harm to general productivity, physical and mental health and increased levels of isolation.